Sunday, March 6, 2016

WeWriWa: Feels Like the First Time


After dancing around the main characters’ long ago connection in PRINCE OF HONOR, my paranormal W-I-P, for months of sneak peeks, I thought I’d let you get a glimpse at how two such opposites could possibly come together with so much baggage pushing between them. It started with that first awkward, never forgotten experience . . . a kiss.

On the cusp of awkward maturity, he’d felt those stirrings of hot-blooded adolescence and curiosity that were the mainstay of conversation amongst his brothers. While Wesley, Stephen, Rico and Colin boasted of salacious and probably highly exaggerated sexual exploits, his cheeks burned and his imagination prowled as he lingered on the outskirts of their discussions. 

It was then Wes’s half-sister Sylvia appeared, a provocative early bloomer inflaming their imaginations with her barely-there skirt, twitching stride and bold interest in their attentions. 

As she’d strutted by, pretending not to hear their lusty speculations, Stephen, a bully even then, gave Turow a hard push in her direction, loudly goading him to make a move. Horrified at becoming the focus of attention, especially when hers turned his way, he froze, earning whooping laughs and ridicule from the others. 

It was the worst moment of his life . . . until the goddess he adored from afar changed everything about it. 

Without a word, she sashayed up to him, taking his hot face between cool hands and pressed her lips to his. When his jaw dropped, her tongue intruded. Tongue! The others stared, astonished and envious to think the quiet, bashful one amongst them would be the first to actually claim that coveted experience. 

Standing there, stunned stupid, Turow would have let the opportunity slip by him if she hadn’t gently whispered, “Close your eyes, grab my butt and give those jackasses something to talk about.”

Could anything be worse than adolescent love? Can you still remember your first clumsy, to die for encounter? Of course you can! Mine was immortalized in PRINCE OF SHADOWS. Sigh . . . It’s something you never forget: Those circumstances, that object of desire, the burst of feelings. But in the case of Turow and Sylvia, will the foundation of that innocent moment be enough to sustain them through the doubts and drama to come?

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25 comments:

  1. Outstanding, Nancy! Wonderful, the whole way through. You drew me into his story, his angst, his insecurity, his sense of not belonging with the others, and then voila! I loved that last line. Sylvia is a great character! I don't know if she has a big place in the story--I hope so. :-)

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    1. Thanks, Teresa. Sylvia - BIG place in this story, right at his side - once she stops fighting it!

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  2. OMG - I LOVE the excerpt!!! Can't wait for the book to become available!

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    1. Thanks, Florence! I writing as fast as my fingers and my 8-to-5 allow me!

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    1. Freudian slip? I adore Sylvia! I think we all wish someone like her had rescued us from our adolescent torment!

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    2. Freudian slip? I adore Sylvia! I think we all wish someone like her had rescued us from our adolescent torment!

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  5. Awesome snippet, Nancy! Absolutely love this scene.Adore Sylvia!

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    1. Thanks, Kim. Figured this scene would change a lot of minds about my heroine.

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  7. LOL! Oh, I feel bad for Turow, and yet, not too bad because the episode seems to be turning out better than it could have.

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    1. Thanks, Marcia! Yes, the moment his luck definitely changed (though the road may not always be smooth!).

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  8. Oh, you captured it beautifully! Well done! Thanks for sharing.

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  9. Well good for her! And for Turow - quite the life changing moment. Loved the snippet!

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  10. Woot Woot! I love her already. Great snippet.

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  11. I love her feisty, precocious attitude!

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    1. Even hardcore villains have a heart - They just have to be reminded. Thanks, Ed!

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  12. Great imagery and use of words - barely there skirt - cusp of awkward maturity. Love it.
    tweeted.

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  13. Love her take charge attitude! And the phrases, like twitching stride are so wonderfully descriptive. Well done!

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