Since we were talking action and brotherly love last week, I’m continuing with one of my favorite devices from my shape-shifter W-I-P, PRINCE OF HONOR – the well placed scene break that says it all so I don’t have to. Sometimes, imagining what goes on between the lines is more fun than having to read them.
“I’ll be right out here,” Sylvia promised.
When he looked back, she’d closed the door between them. Row stiffened, sensing her moving farther and farther away from him. When he reached for the door in alarm, a gesture from Cale put his king’s hulking bodyguard between him and it.
“What’s going on, Cale?”
“Remember I’m your brother and your king, and that Bull can rip your arms and legs off without breaking a sweat. There’s something I need to tell you and I want your promise you’ll hear me out before you react. Then, if you want to hit me, Bull won’t stop you.”
Cale sat on the made up couch holding a frozen Limearita can to one throbbing eye while the other tracked Turow’s travels back and forth across the living space.
It had taken some doing to get Bull to wait in the hall, leaving him alone with his possibly fratricidal brother.
So . . . Did you need it spelled out or did that dramatic break give you the chance to picture it yourself?
Now for the recap to bridge the gap between action/reaction. Word count at almost 78K! Full steam ahead!
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