Sunday, November 26, 2017

WeWriWa: Counting Blessings . . . and Stars


Still in a tryptophan coma from Thanksgiving, I'm offering up on a platter this next scene from PRINCE OF FOOLS that continues from last week's excerpt that ended with hunky hero Rico suggesting to a skittish Amber that she upgrade her living situation . . . 


Before she could stammer something inane like "Are you asking me to move in?" Evie hollered, "Mom, c'mon or I'll be late!" forcing Amber to shake off that wistful folly. There was no room for the two of them in his one-bedroom bachelor abode.

"Just a sec," she called back, slipping out from under the situation with a quick rinse of her brush without making further eye contact. Had things so changed between the three of them that there was there no going back to the cautious distance she preferred to keep?

If she had reservations, the sight of the two of them standing at the stove sent them scattering with Rico sneaking a strip of bacon, Evie trying to swat him with a spoon, him so large and protective, her so innocently trusting . . . the two she loved more than life.

Rico glanced her way, still grinning, and the flare of heat in his eyes incinerated all doubts on the spot as he called, "Get it while it’s hot.” 

With his still sleep-heavy eyes, in his rumpled tee shirt and on the edge of being too revealing sweat pants, the hot that came to mind wasn’t breakfast until he reminded, “This kid’s got school.”

While she was steered toward the table, Rico and Evie made an efficient tandem in the kitchen, filling and passing plates, her so slight and serious, him so happy and . . . hot. 

She could have this every morning of every day.

It was all Amber could do to swallow past the tightness in her throat, the scene so perfect . . . too perfect to be real.

What's a guy gotta do? Put a ring on it (or in his case, a Terriot diamond earring in it)? Me thinks she doth protest too much. Maybe all she needs is a little convincing for her to count her blessings instead of believing she's reaching for the stars. We'll find out in next weekend's post. I'll be hosting my critique group pals for our holiday festivities as December starts off with a literal (make that literary) bang beginning with thanks and ending with giving.

Speaking of giving, I'm participating again this year in Literary Escapism's Black Friday event that puts our book characters in the middle of holiday madness. I've written a "coulda been" scene from PRINCE OF FOOLS featuring Rico and Amber's daughter Evangeline on a shopping trip that, if you've read the book, doesn't end well. Enjoy the extra scene, and a chance for a winner's choice of one of the four Kindle e-books leading up to PRINCE OF FOOLS. While you're there, see what other heroes and heroines are doing when they take a little holiday R-and-R!

Don't forget, my "Midnight to Moonlight" Reduced Price/New Release tour is ongoing through the 30th with a shot at a $10 Amazon gift card (a Happy New Year's gift to the lucky winner!).

Excuse me while I go hop on the treadmill to work off some pie poundage before Tuesday's pre-surgery doctor's appointment (talk about the scales of justice!). Hope all who celebrated Thanksgiving found plenty to be thankful for (Make that everyone. It never hurts to be thankful!). What are some of the things on that list? Mine starts with an extra four hours of sleep on the weekend!

Happy writing fellow Warriors!!



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26 comments:

  1. I like that this scene isn't just about lust but about the quieter, more lasting aspects of love.

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    1. Those are the most satisfying, aren't they!

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  2. She really needs to look past the fear if she wants to reach for the stars. They are within her grasp and a million miles away if she doesn't get past the fear.

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    1. Exactly, Jenna. Sometimes we don't grab for what's right in front of us. Silly us!

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  3. What a great scene to show Amber's conflicted thoughts! :)

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  4. You've done a great job capturing her inner turmoil and showing how she's wavering. Great snippet.

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    1. Thanks, Jess!! She's got plenty of both to deal with.

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  5. I doubt it will go so smoothly or well. Great snippet.

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  6. I hope they get this happiness (after whatever drama ensues, of course :D)!

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  7. So conflicted! And that thought - too perfect to be real - that's always the worry isn't it?

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    1. Too good to be true . . . usually is, but that shouldn't stop us from going after it!

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  8. Whatever happened to her in the past must have been pretty terrible for her fear to remain so strong. Great job of showing how she's melting.

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    1. Fear for him more than her at this point!

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  9. Great push and pull of emotions here. Well done!

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  10. Enjoyed the scene - quite a set of contrasts between the homey kitchen scene feels, her thoughts about making the situation permanent and her thoughts about how HOT he is LOL. Great snippet!

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  11. So much conflict in this snippet, I felt you really showed us her feelings of uncertainty.

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  12. She feels uncertain, but how can she resist giving him a chance? Such a lovely snippet.

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    1. I know I couldn't resist!! Thanks, Elaine!

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  13. So many buzzing thoughts in such a cosy place. I love it.

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