Sunday, November 12, 2017

WeWriWa: Spinning Out of Control


Being a born and raised Michigander, that first morning on icy roads going to work is a winter rite of passage: Don't do nothing dumb and watch out for those who don't know any better. It's in the '20s, the car windows have been heavily christened by Jack Frost yet the roads look deceptively clear. The sun rise is brilliant. But I always assume the worst - Don't believe it! It's a trap. When you least expect it - expect it. Sure enough, at the first red light, that warning growl of my brake system. Do I ignore them or proceed with care? That's the position my PRINCE OF FOOLS heroine is in. She wants to believe what she has is real but the ABSs are shrieking a warning in this continued 8-10 line scene . . .

She paced a tight circle in her little kitchen, panic surging, a dark, sickening tide over what she’d never considered, that Rico might bring disaster to her door, a question that went a step farther as she confronted her brother to demand, "Are they watching you, too? I want you to leave my house and not come back, do you hear me?" 

Seeing his argument backfire, Auguste sputtered, "But Evie--" 

"Evie doesn't know you, and I don't ever want her to learn what you've become, so stay away from us . . . you ruin everything you touch!" 

"I was just trying to protect you, Ammy . . . you don't know men like them and what they want." 

A harsh laugh, "Oh, I think I learned all about men like that at dear Daddy's side and you're not going to bring that ugliness back into my life. You're as dead and gone to me as he is." 

Teary-eyed, angry but frustratingly without any argument, her brother grabbed up his coat and was out the door. 

Amber stood motionless in the kitchen, paralyzed by grief and fear and loss, knowing it was over: The dream, the desire, the hopes that they'd become more. Rico Terriot was a luxury she couldn't afford.

Am I the only one who wants to yell, "Girl, don't panic and lose control! Go slow and steady until the tires grip pavement!" 


New release is going well, not an Indy start but a steady advance with a brisk pick up in sales of the first two books of the series to salt the way and give me confidence as I travel on with book four, PRINCE OF DREAMS.

Happy Writing, fellow Warriors and hope your roads are clear with lots of traction in the coming week!


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27 comments:

  1. The opening paragraph of this snippet is intense. I love it!

    What I've never understood about Michigan drivers and icy roads is how so many seem to forgotten how to handle snow/ice during the summer months, and are always surprised when they slide through stop signs.

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    1. Thanks, Jess!! LOL! Short term memory loss, I guess!

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  2. That definitely did backfire for her brother.

    It's the same here on the first snowfall. Some remember how to drive in the weather, while others drive worse than on clear roads.

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    1. Indeed it did. Best laid plans and all that. True! Bad drivers don't need road conditions to blame.

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  3. oh wow, harsh. The snippet makes me wonder about her history and what her brother was doing there in the first place.

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    1. Deservedly. A history best not remembered, but one that will need to be dealt with.

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  4. Yikes! Though I have a feeling sending her brother on his way is a good move. Now she just needs to take a deep breath and concentrate on the road. Man, I don’t miss snowy roads!

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    1. She may spin out at first but I think she'll hold the road in the long run!

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  5. We all gotta have that moment of despair, when we know the dawn isn't going to come. I hope she powers through it. Great snippet!

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  6. Short-term memory loss is a good description of some drivers. Sheesh. Nancy, I am so mad at you! I stayed up until 3am to finish Prince of Fools. Damn, girl, I feel like a zombie this morning. What a rocking, wild ride. Best wishes with the launch of this new release.

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    1. I'd apologize for your sleeplessness . . . but I don't think I will! Pleeeease leave a review, even if it's just to say what you just did, and I will thank you endlessly.

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    2. Just saw the review . . . Thank you!!!

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  7. Oooo this is a very intense and emotional scene, I love it!

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  8. Well I definitely urge her not to give up! I have confidence in Rico...quite an emotional snippet, very well done.

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    1. Thanks, Jean. She's in good hands with Rico, whether she knows it or not.

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  9. Love this glimpse into her family, and that last line was excellent. Congratulations on a successful release.
    Here in Oregon, it seems that people forget that the first heavy rains also make the roads slick. Too many folks on auto-pilot until all of a sudden the brakes don't work.

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    1. Thanks, Alexis!! Too many folks talking on the phone, eating their sausage McMuffins and putting on mascara, too. It's a wonder we ever arrive alive!!

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  10. This snippet absolutely grabbed me. Can't wait to find out what happens next. Great job!

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  11. What an emotional scene. I hope she won't give up just yet. :)

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    1. Thanks, Karen!! No worries . . . just yet.

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  12. How trying. I hope they can reconcile at some point.

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  13. Very intense scene. Can't help but wonder if she's shooting herself in the foot by sending her brother on his way.

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  14. Oh what a tightly written, emotional scene, I just want to read on! Great snippet!

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