Sunday, June 21, 2020

WeWriWa: The Pause that Refreshes . . . RISE BY MOONLIGHT


Okay, I confess. Last week, I was a wreak. But now that the scramble to get in one last read thru on my W-I-P is complete, it’s been swept from my hands and into those of my trusty line-editing critique partner/retired English teacher for that final whack of a ruler. Grammar is NOT my forte (even though I finally learned what a preposition is after doing homework with my 7th grade grandson!). Now comes my favorite part of writing . . . a break! And it’s just what my hero of the By Moonlight series needed, too, as we visit this week’s excerpt from RISE BY MOONLIGHT.

Time had escaped him as he’d run the woods with the Terriots. Hours lost meaning as they’d hunted and challenged, at one with the earth and the air and the sky, basic beings driven by uncomplicated joy within the security of the pack. He hadn’t experienced such freedom . . . since his father had taught him those secrets he’d never shared with another, until now. That their kind could shift into a pure animal form, one of four-legged simplicity. 

The day had been more than simple fun. He’d been pushing them, testing them, gaging their abilities. And they’d far surpassed expectations. If he had to go into a battle he wasn’t sure he could win, they were who he’d want at his side. 

But would they be enough?

All work, no play. Not a good scenario. So, what does one do on a two-week break? Being OCD, I had a loooong list of tasks, but being ADD as well, I promptly overlooked it to do the one thing I needed to do most . . .

My zen place is Tucson, AZ. The mountains, the space, the fresh air (which unfortunately is being devastated and polluted by a very scary fire on those beloved acres! Send positive thoughts their way!) so I’ve created a mini-desert on the patio to enjoy with my cat and my second cup of coffee each mid-morning. Nothing but the sound of leaves rustling, birds chirping . . . and the neighbors’ lawn mowers . . . arghhhh!


For those of you who tackle your own grammar, here’s a handy chart so you can make sense of your proof reader’s comments’.


Hope you’re having a great weekend, fellow Warriors. I’m hoping for a little rain to cut these near-90s temperature, but being in Michigan, it’s better than snow!

Happy Writing!! And don’t forget to take a break.


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22 comments:

  1. Interesting how even when at play, he can't fully relax. Great snippet!

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    1. He's an uptight dude . . . with reason. For him, this IS relaxed!

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  2. I love love LOVE your mini desert!!! Great post. P.S. I have a trick on how to remember the difference between lie and lay. Next time we chat...

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  3. He's always thinking. I curious to more and if they will be enough. Hopefully, they will be.

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  4. I'd want those guys on my side (or at my back). Glad you're getting a break, Nancy. You deserve it after this long haul. So good to see you yesterday via Zoom for our chapter meeting. You're looking good, kid.

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    1. I can't believe how uplifting it is to see faces and hear voices of fellow writers and friends!

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  5. You are absolutely correct about the need to take a break.
    I enjoyed your description of running with the pack.

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  6. Interesting perspective on his companions. And I love those proofreader's marks.

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    1. Aren't they great. Grammar and punctuation are not my strong points.

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  7. That was a thoroughly satisfying snippet, flowed and carried the reader along with the mood. And I like your mini desert too...

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  8. You need to turn those proofreader marks into emojis!

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    1. What a great idea. Can you image the FB replies!

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  9. I scrolled down to tweet your post went too far and there were kittens!!!! No ADD here.
    That was a such a joyful snippet - the freedom - then with the little twist at the end. :-)
    Tweeted.

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    1. Thanks, Daryl! Yes, I always stop for animal posts!!

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  10. He did seem to be enjoying his break, although I see he's one of those people who can never divorce himself entirely from the current job or problem. But it does sound like he had a good time! Tweeted.

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  11. The visuals here are amazing. I love how the play was also a test, I assume (if I was the physically active sort) this would be the kind of workout to have: the teamwork, the fun, and the work all coming together. Although all of them together may be dangerous if you're not on their side. Loved this snippet!

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  12. The sounds of one who enjoys their work. And gets satisfaction out of it, bug yet not satisfied with well enough. Much like a writer. WeWriWa is our pack and we go through the challenges of writing together and the security of the pack of our group. We get to the end of one of us completing a WIP, but we always wonder is it enough. Is what we learned good enough?

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