One of the least anticipated and anxious moments of a new relationship is that first meet and greet with their family. Will you like them? Will they like you? Will you fit in comfortably or wish you could run screaming in the opposite direction at first sight? Those first impressions can make or break a budding romance. Since I’m returning to my WIP, PRINCE OF DREAMS, it’s time for Ophelia to meet the family . . . who aren’t quite what she expected. They’re . . . more. But what, exactly?
Kip’s brothers shared the same brutally handsome looks. A powerful air of danger swirled about them like an exotic cologne. With the unblinking intensity of their stares and almost predatory body postures, their unnatural stillness produced a violent energy rippling from them with the force of an approaching tsunami. The uncomfortable press of a foreign presence closed in around her, creating an almost suffocating threat.
What was wrong with these people? The diamonds in their ears, the flash, the suits, the eddies of danger. Illegal commodities dealers? Blackwaterish thugs? Her father’s profession gave her a foolproof underworld detector, and readings were jumping all over the place. Her intuitive nature urged her to run for her life . . . while she could.
Family seems an appropriate theme as I’m hosting my 10-year-old grandguy for his Spring Break. First you notice while most things are the same, some are subtly different. But what exactly has changed? It takes a while to pick up on the differences (and hey, kids are strange, foreign little creatures at their best!) as they evolve from cute, cuddly youngsters to opinionated near teens. But after an awkward adjustment, it’s like no time has passed at all.
At least I didn’t discover he’s from a family of powerful shapeshifters! (Or maybe that would explain a lot!).
It’s off to the mall to see if the little guy is more Toys R Us or Game Stop these days. The fun is in the discovery. I hope after a few chapters my heroine will agree . . .
Happy Writing, fellow Warriors and Happy Where the Heck Is Spring?
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At least I didn’t discover he’s from a family of powerful shapeshifters! (Or maybe that would explain a lot!).
It’s off to the mall to see if the little guy is more Toys R Us or Game Stop these days. The fun is in the discovery. I hope after a few chapters my heroine will agree . . .
Happy Writing, fellow Warriors and Happy Where the Heck Is Spring?
Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Share an 8 to 10 sentence snippet of your writing on Sunday. Visit other participants on the list and read, critique, and comment on their 8sunday posts.
Spread the word, share the love, warriors - Hashtag #8sunday.
Yikes! I wonder if she really will run from them. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteIf she's smart . . . but then where's the story in that?
DeleteReally a wonderful snippet. I loved the whole idea of the difficult meet the family moment, amped up a thousand fold by these guys! FUN!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jean. Not your every day possible future inlaws!
DeleteWow, great description of the fam! As if those moments aren't hard enough, she gets thrown in with a pack of shifters. Great stuff.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis! But she comes with some baggage of her own . . .
DeleteThe way you describe the family through her eyes--well, I'd sure get the hell out of Dodge! They sound scary as hell! But that's what makes them such a fun read. :) Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna. Good thing she doesn't scare easily or it would be a very short story.
DeleteOoo I like the atmosphere you set!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Amy! Nothing like a little tension to ease the moment.
DeleteThis sounds like a super unnerving experience. Great descriptive details!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina! But I bet she'll come back for more.
DeleteYikes! I'm feeling that snippet---I am ready to run!
ReplyDeleteEnjoy spring break with your little guy! :-)
Thanks, Teresa. An awesome time was had by all!
DeleteRun, run, run!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet.
Thanks, Karen!
Deletefoolproof underworld detector - I like that. Hope she listens to it!!
ReplyDeleteEnjoy your spring break with grandguy.
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Thanks, Daryl! But romance turns a deaf ear. GG and I had a fab time!
DeleteRun fast!
ReplyDeleteBut not fast and far enough . . .
DeleteI guess it might not be so easy to run...but that's what I'd feel like doing in her place. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lyn! You and me both!
DeleteOMG! I just love this. I'd want to both stay and run in equal measure, but I'd probably be frozen to the spot with cuiosity. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank You!! It's that damned if you do moment. Gotta love them!
DeleteThese people sound the (potential) in-laws from hell.
ReplyDeleteNot exactly hell . . . on earth, maybe.
DeleteSounds pretty frightening. I'd say 'run!' but somehow I doubt she'll be able to get away.
ReplyDeleteJust put it in drive and go, girlfriend. But she'll still be looking out the rearview.
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