"What did I do?" His voice, so low and broken, brought tears to her eyes with his vow, "I can make it right, there has to be some way."
"There's nothing." Amber swallowed hard through the words, barely recognizing them as her own, telling him, "Please, Frederick, don't make this more difficult for either of us."
His brow bumped the back of her head, uneven breaths scorching her neck as he whispered, "Then tell me you don't want me, tell me you don't love me, and I'll leave you alone. You'll never see me again. Tell me, if that's what you really want."
She couldn't force those lies through the tightness in her throat, not with him standing up against her, supplying that heat she'd longed for. As the silence stretched out, his shivery exhale stirred her hair and his hands came up to rub her forearms, a slow, gentle friction.
"Ammy, you don't have to carry whatever this is alone.”
What do you think? (I'm still loudly singing along here at work while typing this up in the absence of attorneys or clients! Sic: Friday). Hopefully, I'll be keyboard deep this coming week in my final draft to get it to my eagle eye editor.
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Beautifully written combining sadness and love.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine!!
DeleteSuch an emotional snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jessica!!!
DeleteA powerful moment indeed and I like his response to her obvious struggle. Terrific!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jean. It only gets better . . . or is that worse?
DeleteVery much enjoyed the emotion and the heart-wrenching dialogue in this scene. Also, excellent song choice! One of my faves! :)
ReplyDeletePicking the music is the best part!!
DeleteShe's all torn up and I'm not sure if he's helping or not.
ReplyDeleteIn his own clumsy way, he is. He gets better at it.
DeleteSuch an emotional snippet. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Elyzabeth!!
DeleteAww, this hurts so good! Love the snippet (and the GIF is ten kinds of wonderful)!
ReplyDeleteHey, everything's better with Dean Winchester!
DeleteOooh, shivers. I don't know, Nancy. For anxious readers October sounds like a long ways away!
ReplyDeleteOne step at a time . . .
DeleteSuch powerful emotion there. Wonderful. And I love the music too!
ReplyDeleteThe plain ole video wouldn't do when this one was so much . . . more!
Delete"uneven breaths scorching her neck as he whispered," Great gesture. Love the scary giphy in the opening.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Trin!!
DeleteIntense scene. I sense it could be a turning point in their relationship.
ReplyDeleteThere's a difference between what you think you shouldn't want and what you actually can't have. Sounds like he might be able to convince her it's the former.
ReplyDeleteSo much her plan for how to deal with her problems; that plan just went out the window.
ReplyDeleteThis is a well done emotional snippet.
ReplyDeleteYou grabbed my heart with this snippet. Congrats on a release date. Can't wait to read.
ReplyDeleteLoved the emotional snippet. Loved the imagery of his touch, his breath, the sound of his voice. Powerful!
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