Sunday, August 12, 2018

WeWriWa: Not What He Pretended . . .


Don’t you hate it when things are going great, you’re sure he’s the one, and then you start asking yourself . . . The right one . . . what?

Ophelia Brady was looking for a dashing knight to rescue her heart from loneliness. But is her hero a wolf in knight’s clothing? Hard to ignore as evidence begins to add up to something supernatural in this excerpt from PRINCE OF DREAMS . . .

“Thank you for being my knight.”Her hand rode the wide curve of his smile. 

“My pleasure.” 

Forcing herself to turn away, she climbed up into the cab, his palm cupping her elbow for a steadying boost. When she looked back with a smile of thanks, the gesture froze. 

The harsh dome light played over his features, revealing details not apparent in the shadowed room or under the cloud-covered moon. On his brow, beneath his strong jaw, there on the jut of his clavicle, small smears of blood told a different story of how he’d dealt with her attacker. 

As she shut the door between them, part of her gloried in the evidence of aggressive action. Another part trembled, recalling the image of red eyes and sharp teeth. 

Her knight was not what he pretended to be.


Final revisions off to editor, so I’m taking a breather from the job and the book as the Grandguy stops in for a week of unabashed spoiling. Pinball, movies, the zoo, Oh My! Can’t wait. But first, off to visit your teasers . . .

Happy almost back to school! Happy Writing, fellow Warriors!


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32 comments:

  1. Julie Evelyn JoyceAugust 12, 2018 at 9:06 AM

    You have such a clever way with words! Love the way you wove together this scene! Have a fabulous time with your grandguy! :)

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    1. Thanks, Julie! Knitting words is the stuff of great fabric! Can't wait to see the "little" guy tomorrow. He comes up to my chin now and I still remember holding him right after he was born like yesterday!

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  2. At least she's got the hints of warning already. Interesting dilemma for her, where he was her gallant rescuer. Enjoyed the snippet!

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    1. Thank you!! Maybe she should have stuck with the nice shallow gigolo.

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  3. Nancy, just when she thought it was safe to go into the water...Exciting and scary.

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    1. Thanks, Charmaine. You gotta watch those nice guys!

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  4. Well, no one's perfect, right? Yikes! Love her conflicted reaction.

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    1. Pretty near . . . except that one little thing!

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  5. I guess he might think it unreasonable to want him to save her but then quibble about how he did it.

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    1. Naw, I think he's pretty certain she'd be right . . . but still take care of it.

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  6. By whatever means required, I guess. No backseat rescuing here!

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    1. Indeed! Though it's not as bad as she suspects . . . at this point, anyway.

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  7. Clashing emotions over how he handled things. I'd have them too. :-)

    Enjoy the week with your grandson! :-)

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    1. Who wouldn't (except me because I know how it will end ; -) Looking forward to the chaos that is an 11-yr old boy!

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  8. Ooh, quite a chilling realisation! I love the skilful way this is written, just makes me want to know more!

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    1. Don't you always know it's a good one when you write it then read it again and go "Oh yeah!"

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  10. I think that would be a chilling revelation if she really hadn't known before. I like the last ling.

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    1. She's adding it all together but you know math . . . the sum of all parts.

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  11. Great last line. She's coming to the realization that she's not in Kansas anymore. Great snippet. Enjoy the time with the grandguy. School starts soon, unfortunately.

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    1. Thanks, Di. School. Yeah, all those mama's in urban assault vehicles pushing their kids out and cutting me off on the way to work so they can race to Starbucks for the 1,200 cal foofoo coffee before heading to the gym . . .

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  12. Loved the snippet. He did save her even if he ends up being a bit more than anticipated. Great last line and I look forward to her finding out just what he is.

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  13. Great portrayal of her conflicted feelings!

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  14. Great snippet! Definitely intriguing and makes me want more.

    Have a great time with your grandson!! I've been enjoying having 100% kid/mom time....so not ready for the school year to start. Ughh. But I am grateful I work for the school district and get summer off, so I can be with them 100%. Enjoy your time :)

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    1. Thanks!! I know how you feel. I was a write at home mom for 15 years and loved every minute of it. Having the little guy here brings those moments back again.

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  15. I enjoyed reading this very evocative scene.could easily see the scene.


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